She walked before man quite exposed
With tendrils of hair and dainty steps
Warm lips embraced the roaring falls
A curving figure of unsullied breath
♣
But perfect, vulnerable waters of paradise
Could not quench the savage lust of man
Her fingers he tied in sadistic knots
The rings of life he groped and kissed away
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He justified himself as sovereign of passion
Appointed to shape a vessel from dirt and foliage
Her voice now restricted like a beaten path
Body unearthed, exhausted, ravished beyond repair
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The wind still cries with each harrowed stroke
A white dove fettered, red falling on dirtied snow
She offered beauty and life night and day
He devoured both and lit the final flame
It is a good poem-however I can’t say it is my kind of poetry I certainly think it is well written and worthy of publishing although I must admit I am not the kind of person who would buy a book of poems written “in this manner” I guess you could say-I know plenty of men and women who do read this type of poetry and who would indeed purchase a book of poetry written by you if that is what you hoping to do-Good luck Jessica
This poem hits you between the eyes, as it’s subject must surely awaken much anger in generations of women, whether you take the meaning as literal or metaphorical . Very nicely written, strong and yet poignant. I read it and felt indignant and angry , and sad and despairing (will things ever change?), so if evoking emotions is one of the aims of poetry, this does it for me. Very nicely done
as ur friendzie, i am sooo puttin in mi 2MILLION cents worth xDD
sozees, i saw the “she” as nature and “he” as mankind
not so much the feminist view of kimmikat but i kno how mucho you luvala ambiguityyyy
so emosewa! <3
Thank you for the “emosewa” reviews. : )
makes me sad, kinda like that ravel-pavane por une infante defunte…i kinda see it both in the feminist and nature view. where did you find this poem?
silly yunyun…i wrote it!
now you’re probably thinking i have too much free time = D
poor dead princess…